In some cities, public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do you think the benefits outweigh the disadvantages?
In some urban areas , public upsides. The first drawback of changing public drawbacks of
parks
and open areas are replaced with gardens
where local people
can grow their own fruit
and vegetables
. Although
this
trend can bring advantages for local residents including, encourage
Wrong verb form
encouraging
people
to eat healthy food. I believe demerits
of Correct article usage
the demerits
this
trend greater outweigh merits
because it can have negative impacts on local Correct article usage
the merits
people
Change noun form
people's
health
, and make local people
less social.
On the one hand, the primary benefit of alter
public Change the verb form
altering
parks
and open
spaces to Replace the word
opening
gardens
is motivate
local Fix the infinitive
to motivate
inhabitants
to eat healthy food. This
is because this
trend can increase availability
of Add an article
the availability
fruit
and vegetables
for local people
, which mean
more Correct subject-verb agreement
means
a
Correct article usage
apply
people
will eat fruit
and vegetables
. Therefore
, local inhabitants
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inhabitants'
inhabitant's
health
will enhance.
On the other hand
, I would like to argue drawbacks of this
development significantly far more thanCorrect article usage
the
parks
and open zones to gardens
is can leads
to adverse consequences on local Change the verb form
lead
people
Change noun form
people's
health
. To illustrate, plant fruit
and vegetables
can attract many insects, which mean
some insects can spread diseases namely, cancer, HIV, and Ebola among local Correct subject-verb agreement
means
inhabitants
. Make
local Wrong verb form
Making
inhabitants
less social is another downside of this
development. This
is because people
often use public parks
and open spaces to socialize with their friends or people
on
Change preposition
in
neighborhood
. Add an article
the neighborhood
Consequently
, replace
public Wrong verb form
replacing
parks
and open spaces with gardens
can make local people
more isolated, which this
can make local Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
are
more likely to get mental Unnecessary verb
apply
health
issues namely, depression, anxiety, and stress.
To sum up
, Although
altering public Correct word choice
apply
parks
and open
places to garden for local Replace the word
opening
inhabitants
in order to grow their own fruit
and vegetables
can bring upsides for local residents including, incentivies
Correct your spelling
incentivizes
incentives
incentivise
people
to eat healthy food. I thinkCorrect article usage
the
this
development outweigh advantages
because it can have Correct article usage
the advantages
detrimental
influence on local Add an article
a detrimental
people
Change noun form
people's
health
, and make local people
less social.Submitted by faiz3177 on
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