The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Aisian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Aisian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with prediction for 2030 and 2040.
This
given chart illustrates the
number
of inhabitants in four dissimilar countries that are located in Asia continent
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been residing in urban areas since 1970 and
also
this
graph predicts the changes in
this
number
in the future.
Overall
, the whole
number
of people who choose to live in cities has increased until now.
Furthermore
, it can be seen that these upward trends will display
this
tendency to continue over the next 20 years. On the one hand, the
number
of dwellers in Malaysia and Indonesia experienced a slight increase over the first two decades of
this
time frame. From 1990 to 2000, the fraction of the whole population in Indonesia relatively rose to about 30%
whereas
this
fraction for Malaysia suddenly soared from 35% to 60%, an increase of 15%.
Moreover
, these two figures rocketed up until the current time and these rising trends seem to go on.
On the other hand
, the percentage of
this
population observed an insignificant increase over
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the first
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20-year period in
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and Thailand.
Whereas
, from 1990 to 2010, they experienced some fluctuations, but both figures again showed an upward trend from 2010 and it is predicted that these growths will be observed till 2040.
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