The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information on the
number
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of diarrhoea
cases
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in the city of Mashhad from 1983 to 1992.
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, the
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of
cases
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fluctuated in
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period reaching the highest point in 1989 and later plummeting to register zero
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of patients in 1992. Starting off with a little over 100
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in 1983, the
number
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of diarrhoea
cases
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climbed consistently over the period of half a decade to hit 200 in 1987.
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, a steep decrease was registered for a year sitting at approximately 100 in 1988 meaning that it was returned to the previous rate. The highest increase was experienced a year later when patients of
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disease quadrupled to roughly 400 in early 1989.
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in the next two years, the
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of patients hovered around 400 and 350
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.
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, in late 1991 figures undertook a precipitous cut in patient rates reaching zero
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in the middle of 1992.
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