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You are studying at a college which has very limited sports and leisure facilities for students. Write a letter to the principal. In your letter; outline the situation propose ways to improve this situation request a meeting to discuss this

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Mr Beat I am writing to you to explain my
situatuion
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situation
. I am a student
of
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 the
last
 grade during my career in the school I always was a good student with
average
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nine
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.
Although
, I have not had, in all
this
 time, any place where rest. I consider
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 for anybody
take
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 a brake when the hard work is too, it is
nessary
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necessary
 to keep a life
healthly
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healthy
healthily
. To improve, we could build a playroom with my mates or maybe do a
collect
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 to raise money to pay a company that can solve
this
 issue.
This
collect
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 could be during the year,
thus
 we
not
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 notice the
increasing
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of
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 the fee. Being
this
 a
pefect
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perfect
 answer for the next generation. I was thinking
in
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 a meeting to discuss that others ideas have the teachers, the students or school owners. It would be interesting
see
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anothers
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another's
another
 views of how we could create new sports and leisure facilities. I believe
that is
neccesary
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necessary
put
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 a date in 3
month
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, thereby we will be prepared for
this
. Faithfully, Francisco Gonzalez
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