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Some governments provide financial assistance for retired, unemployed and disabled citizens. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#governments #assistance #citizens
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Dear Sir/Madam, I have read your advertisement
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 and found that your
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 is looking for
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 Researchers position. I would like to apply for the said position. My name is Arman Effendi, graduated from IPB University, majoring in Applied Meteorology in 2023. I am highly motivated to learn new things and always seek opportunities that come to me to build my experience and challenge me. During my college, I was active in many organizations, I was Head of Officer in Program Management
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Senior Resident, and I was appointed to
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 Project Officer and Team Leader for
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 Program of Village Development and Empowerment (PHP2D). I have some work experience in the writing sector
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I have
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 website called "JURNALIKLIM". Now, I am looking for a
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 that can make me grow together to be a better person. I have good motivation for experience and growth, eager to learn, and can work with a team or by myself. I will use my work opportunity responsibly and contribute with my
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 energy. With my qualifications, I am confident that I will be able to contribute effectively to your
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 I would like to express my gratitude for your attention and I hope I could be
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 part of your
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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