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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The illustrations are two maps of the
Grange
park
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 in 1920 and today respectively.
Overall
,
this
park
 underwent a dramatic change.
Firstly
, looking at the map
in
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of
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 1920. In the centre of the
Grange
park
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, there is a fountain with three layers. To the west of it, a stage for musicians
located
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, with four seats and two rose gardens around. In the northeastern
site
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side
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 of the
park
, there is a
pond
 for water plants, and another rose
garden
 is to the northwest of it.
Furthermore
, a glasshouse was built to the south of the
pond
. Shifting our attention to today's map of the
Grange
park
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. The fountain
was
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no longer existed;
insted
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instead
, a rose
garden
 is in the
contre
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corner
 of the
park
, with four seats around. To the southeast of the rose
garden
, a water feature was built, and there is a new entrance to the east of it, which
connect
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connects
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 the underground car
park
 and the
Grange
park
. Concerning the northeast corner of the
park
, a
childern's
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children's
paly
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play
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 area supersedes the
pond
, and the
garden
 beside the
pond
 is changed
to
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into
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 a cafe.
Besides
, the stage for musicians has changed to
amphitheatre
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an amphitheatre
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 for concerts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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