The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reposting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

Summaries the information by selecting and reposting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps below show an
island
, before and after the
construction
of some tourist facilities. Summarize the information by selecting and reposting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The given maps illustrate the
island
before and after the refurbishment of some tourist amenities.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that lots of accommodations and some facilities were built after the
construction
, and the road and transport track are
also
constructed. Looking at the information in more detail, before the
construction
, there were only trees on each side of the
island
and a beach in the west.
Moreover
, the
island
was surrounded by the sea. Those still remain the same after the
construction
. If we look at after-development, the accommodations are located between a restaurant and a receptionist. Those accommodation's shapes are circular and those connect with the footpath
while
the restaurant and the receptionist link with a vehicle track. The swimming area builds near the beach.
Finally
, there is a pier to access sailing where two ships are available.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, construction with synonyms.
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