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Discuss both sides some people believe that artists are considered a waste of time the money should go to at her things others are not seeing it as a waste of time

#people #artists #waste #time #money
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Some
people
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 believe that when
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 pay attention to
artists
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, spending
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 on them is considered a waste of
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 . As there are a lot of poor
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 need it,
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 others believe that it helps boost the economy ,as it reflects nations' cultures. I think that it's not a waste of our resources. Spending
money
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 on
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 can’t be considered as loss of
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 ,
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 it takes billions of dollars ,its advantages over weight the disadvantage’s. It helps in the spread of cultures, as it consists of many fields, and each one of them plays a crucial role in our life . As without actors ,and actress we will face difficulties in bringing up our
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 : they helped us in raising our daughters and sons by making the molar things ,as telling truth movie for
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 .So they enjoy it
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 learn from it.
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, the first child movie made by an American woman whose age was 60 at
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 time helped plenty of families in bringing up theirfeelldren ,
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 I feel that it is a necessary field for our generation . some
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 think that
artists
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 are not the suitable field to pay attention to it . They believe that there are huge amounts of
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 who face death every day : Many of them are under measurement of the poverty line, and many of them suffer from wars in their
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. So it’s moral to pay attention to these humans it is a kind of humanity to focus on these
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.
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,
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 like Syria and Yemen whose citizens migrate from them because of wars, and poor
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 like Africa whose
children
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 can’t find what to eat. I concede
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 view but spending
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 on
artists
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 will provide us by generations who can tackle
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 problem. As we will have generations who cares about each other, if the molar planted on them it is reflects sustainability method . In conclusion, whiles some
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 believe
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 are waste of
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 others believe that it is necessary for cultural sperdation, and bringing
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 up .I completely agree with it. It is necessary for bringing our
children
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 up ,and sprears cultures .
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Your opinion

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