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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extend do you agree?

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It is argued that more funds should be expenditure on roads and motorways rather than on public
transport
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. In my opinion, I believe that both thoroughfare and public transportation
systems
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 have a vital role to play in modern society, and
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 they should be equally invested in.
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 with, roadways that have good quality will increase the level of safety and reduce traffic congestion.
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, in many cities and provinces in Vietnam, the number of
subways
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subway
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 accidents has been ever-increasing because there are a lot of holes in the trail’s surface.
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 is evident that the authorities should spend money improving road
systems
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 to ensure the safety of people.
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, building wider roads and more motorways in big cities like Ha Noi or Ho Chi Minh City, where traffic congestion is still a major problem, will help to increase road capacity. It means that there will be more space for a large number of
vehicles
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.
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, better public
transport
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systems
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 are beneficial for the environment and people who do not have private
vehicles
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. It is more convenient to commute by private
vehicles
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 rather than waiting for buses and trains, which might be limited in terms of route and time. In fact, some modes of public
transport
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 like subways produce less pollutants than cars and other private
vehicles
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. Nowadays, developing countries with overpopulation will lead to
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 the traffic density.
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, building more public
transport
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systems
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 is the best solution to
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 major problem. In conclusion, I think the government should spend money on buses, trains, and undergrounds because these transports not only have less pollution but
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 fulfil the demand of billion commuters in the world
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task response
The introduction should clearly express the writer's opinion and outline the main points to be discussed.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear progression of ideas and arguments throughout the essay. Use linking words to connect the ideas within and between paragraphs.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Transportation
  • Congestion
  • Economy
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Social inclusion
  • Urban development
  • Efficient
  • Investment
  • Reliance
  • Boosting
  • Affordable
  • Private vehicle users
  • Public transport system
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