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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is an influence professional sportsman on teenagers. It is undeniable that they have a vital role in our life, especially youths’.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
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 influence
professional
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sportsman
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sportsmen
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on teenagers. It is undeniable that they have a vital role in our life, especially
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youths
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.
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, other
people
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 consider it can be detrimental. In my opinion, I
belive
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 that some sportsman especially professionals has a good emphasis on
physical
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the physical
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health
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 and mental
health
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 of
youngers
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younger
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. On the one hand, some
people
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 think that young
people
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, who admire
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professional athletes
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a
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strong
health
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 and
they
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also
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 are disciplined.
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, they always have a clear mind and an easy character.
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, individuals who do gymnastics
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look slimmer and do better academically in most cases
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ones
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those
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 who do not do it.
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, it is often believed
that is
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 better and safer if children are not getting e[ample from
atheletes
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athletes
 because of several reasons.
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, the common reason is that it is a dangerous occupation for
health
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.
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, most
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young
people
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 get injured as
result
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 of a fall in figure skating.
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, there are
people
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, who argue that
this
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 saying is not right, because they
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believe
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 every person is capable enough to make the difference between right and wrong. In conclusion, taking
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everything mentioned into account I would argue that
people
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 doing sports professionally can play a
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main
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 role in order to affect of youth positively
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 because they have fans and followers everywhere.
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, I guess that it is right to say that
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sports person
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sportsperson
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 can make a tremendous
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 model for the younger generation of a community.

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