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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #governments #individuals
In the present society, there are many
plastics
 in the world,which comes from factories and industries,
people
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and people
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use
it
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them
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 to facilitate shopping,
working
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 and other activity. They like to
use
 it because when they
use
 it they can throw it away without having to reuse
for
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,for
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 example,
plastic
 bags,
plastic
bottle
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bottles
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 and
plastic
 packaging.In the following paragraph, a view of
this
 topic will be discussed in detail. Today We will find
plastics
 on the beach area or street,
it
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which
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 make own the world dirty,
Moreover
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,Moreover
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 there is
effect
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an effect
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to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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such
 as aquatics
eat
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eating
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 many
plastics
,which
they
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apply
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can not
biodegradable
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be biodegradable
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 not only
damage
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do damage
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to
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apply
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animal
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an animal
the animal
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 under the sea but
also
it
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apply
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will diminish
of
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apply
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aquatic same.
Additional
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Additionally
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 many peoples have thinking
plastics
 will facilitate
for
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apply
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them,
such
 as when they go outside from home
for
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to
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buy something at the store,they
use
plastics
 for putting things.And that will make dross in the world.So government should
to
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apply
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do something for all
animal
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animals
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 and
environment
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the environment
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,for
exam
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the exam
an exam
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 they should add
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a law
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law
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laws
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 or make new technology
for
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to
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 clear all
plastics
such
 as
make
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making
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 robots
for
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to
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 export and
keep
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keeping
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plastic
.
Moreover
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,Moreover
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 we can help them
such
 as we can keep cleanliness by if we see dross or
plastic
 we can put it in the bin.If we get it that will make good inherent,
environment
 and animal welfare. In the
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paragraph
paragarb
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,paragarb
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 you can see
plastics
effect
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affect
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to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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,
which
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and
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 there are many negative from
plastics
 but the government and individuals can help them by
make
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making
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 discipline in
own
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their own
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 community or country.
However
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 if we work together that will help
to
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apply
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animals,aquatic,plant and
environment
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the environment
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same
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the same
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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