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Writing Samples
Band 8

You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter * describe the item * explain where and when you left it * say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing an inquiry about one of my belongings that I have left in a train of your company which I took from Paris to Lyon
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 week on Saturday evening. The item I lost was a red cashmere scarf that I was wearing that day. The floral pattern with vibrant green and pink little roses on the cherry red base colour it makes a visible object if it falls under the seats.
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 the fact of it being an inheritance from my grandmother, it is
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 hand-made from a well-known Italian brand which makes it cost $1000 today. To make it clearer, I took the train on Saturday evening and arrived at 18:00 Lyon when I immediately realized the absence of my colourful accessory when I had not left the station yet. So it is definitely left on the train. What I respectfully ask you is to search for it as soon as possible and make sure to look under the main seats in the centre. Please write an announcement on the station's board that I am assuring to give a $500 reward to the finder of my scarf. Looking forward to hearing from you, Narges Amin

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task achievement
Provide more details about when you took the train and consider mentioning the specific train number if possible.
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Make sure to emphasize the emotional value of the scarf a bit more to make your request more compelling.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using transitions between ideas to enhance cohesion, particularly between describing the item and explaining when it was lost.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
You effectively convey the emotional significance of the item, which adds depth to your request.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable
  • distinguishing features
  • route
  • carriage
  • seat number
  • lost and found department
  • appropriate steps
  • contact information
  • swift and positive action
  • item of value
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