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The table illustrates data about earnings of senior grade's tutors in states as Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan, Korea during 2009

The table illustrates data about earnings of senior grade's tutors in states as Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan, Korea during 2009
#data #earnings #grade #tutors #states #australia #denmark #luxembourg #japan #korea
The table illustrates data about earnings of senior
grade's
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grade
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tutors in states as Australia, Denmark,
Luxembourg
, Japan,
Korea
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and Korea
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 during 2009 Feature of the given table is the highest
salary
 was owned by
Luxembourg
whereas
 the smallest
salary
 was
shwon
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shown
won
 by Australia It is obvious that Australia had 28000 in the beginning and almost doubled
afer
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after
 15
years
 with
its
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' 48000 and it takes nine
years
 to reach maximum stipends
regrdless
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regardless
 of upward.Denmark had exhibited 45000 before having 54000 as the greatest amount after 8
years
.80
thousands
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thousand
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 were experienced by
Luxembourg
 and afterwards 30
years
 it had 119000 .
Luxembourg
's
the
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paramount fee was 132000 after 30
years
 and it
the
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was the
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 supreme
salary
 among other kingdoms. Japan initiated with 34000 as the first cash and it almost doubled to 65000 in 15
years
, to rocket the biggest
salary
 they needed 37
years
 to acquire 86000. 30000 was narrated by Korea and 18000 was added after a
while
 and after 34
years
 they had 62000 as the greatest hire
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words luxembourg, salary, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • earnings
  • senior grade tutors
  • data
  • Australia
  • Denmark
  • Luxembourg
  • Japan
  • Korea
  • comparison
  • different countries
  • table
  • values
  • differences
  • reasons
  • economic factors
  • local currencies
  • teaching profession
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