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It is better to run your own business than to work for someone else. To what extent do yo agree or disagree?

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Nowadays entrepreneurs are considered to have more advantages than ordinary employees. Despite a few issues, including a huge amount of responsibilities, I reckon that running a private company definitely has a number of valuable benefits. On one hand, choosing a business carrier means having unlimited duties and challenges, which could be a significant part of a daily routine. If a person wants to run his own company, it would be necessary to expect some difficulties even from the beginning of
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, most individuals are totally afraid of being an entrepreneur
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 the fact that there is a high possibility of unstable income,
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 not everyone decides to take
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, sometimes it takes decades to reach desirable results,
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 businessmen or businesswomen could not have merely ordinary working hours in order to succeed in a specific sphere.
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, I believe that the development of own ideas has numerous benefits. Independence in every choice is a prime example of
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 entrepreneurs are more likely to manage their lifestyle in a way that seems to be the best for them.
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, they are free to choose their partners, an office location and a vacation duration.
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, when the owner passed away, an enterprise could be run by other family members, especially by children. It would definitely be a valuable contribution for the younger generation and would leave warm memories about the person for ages.
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, despite varying opinions, I reckon that the advantages of running your own business unquestionably outweigh the disadvantages,
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 it could depend on a temperament of a person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • flexibility
  • decision-making
  • learning curve
  • personal growth
  • potential
  • income
  • risk
  • challenge
  • ownership
  • security
  • benefits
  • employment
  • work-life balance
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