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Most countries have traditional celebrations that occur annually. In your opinion, what benefits do these celebrations have for society?

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Almost every
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 has its unique
traditions
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 which they are celebrating annually and they have great
influence
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culture
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 and have unifying meaning for them. Historically
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 that the most powerful thing for a
country
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 to survive is its cultural heritage which is transferred through generations. On the other ,hand many newly discovered
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 try to make
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 artificially because of their unifying feature.
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 with, ancient civilisations we have huge data about their
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,
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 celebration methods of them and certainly their
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 historical heritage. For ,instance in ancient ,Armenia
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 of the most celebrated
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 was Vardavar which was a pagan holiday but because of its popularity, it continued to be
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 of the most important and lovely holidays for Armenians during Christianity as well. The most memorable thing during Vardavar is water rubbing
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 another which was explained that with water people leave evil from them. On the other ,hand many newly discovered
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 started to make artificial
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 or in some way copy them from other more culturally rich
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 their
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 because they understand a huge unifying
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 of
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.
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 of them is a neighbouring
country
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 Armenia which copied almost everything from the culture of its ancient neighbours and tried to advertise her
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 with them.
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 of the musical instruments which is historically
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 its relationship with ancient Persia the
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 which I mentioned becomes its traditional instrument using propaganda for that.
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 it is not a respected way to make a cultural heritage for their descendants
countries
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 like in my example they can unite the main part of their population around that idea. In conclusion , I would say that traditional celebrations have a huge good impact on
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' society even though some of them were created artificially and did not have a connection with the special
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 but have a unifying
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 regardless of that.

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