Most countries have traditional celebrations that occur annually. In your opinion, what benefits do these celebrations have for society?

Almost every
country
has its unique
traditions
which they are celebrating annually and they have great
influence
countries'
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culture
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and have unifying meaning for them. Historically
proved
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that the most powerful thing for a
country
to survive is its cultural heritage which is transferred through generations. On the other ,hand many newly discovered
countries
try to make
traditions
artificially because of their unifying feature.
To begin
with, ancient civilisations we have huge data about their
traditions
,
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celebration methods of them and certainly their
influence
of
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historical heritage. For ,instance in ancient ,Armenia
one
of the most celebrated
traditions
was Vardavar which was a pagan holiday but because of its popularity, it continued to be
one
of the most important and lovely holidays for Armenians during Christianity as well. The most memorable thing during Vardavar is water rubbing
one
another which was explained that with water people leave evil from them. On the other ,hand many newly discovered
countries
started to make artificial
traditions
or in some way copy them from other more culturally rich
countries
their
traditions
because they understand a huge unifying
influence
of
traditions
.
One
of them is a neighbouring
country
Armenia which copied almost everything from the culture of its ancient neighbours and tried to advertise her
country
with them.
For example
one
of the musical instruments which is historically
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its relationship with ancient Persia the
country
which I mentioned becomes its traditional instrument using propaganda for that.
Although
it is not a respected way to make a cultural heritage for their descendants
countries
like in my example they can unite the main part of their population around that idea. In conclusion , I would say that traditional celebrations have a huge good impact on
countries
' society even though some of them were created artificially and did not have a connection with the special
country
but have a unifying
influence
regardless of that.
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