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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 chart illustrates
top
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the top
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 ten
countries
 in terms of their
electricity
production
 and
consumption
 in 2014. The following text summarizes the main features which can be extracted from
this
 chart. The nations with the highest amount of
production
 and
consumption
 of
electricity
 are
china
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China
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 and
USA
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the USA
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 (in order of their ranking); they produce and consume
electricity
in
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at
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 a significantly higher rate than other
countries
 on the list with
China
 producing 5.398 billion kWh and consuming 5.322 billion kWh, and
USA
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the USA
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 having the
production
-
consumption
 ratio of 4.099 and 3.866 respectively.
In other words
, the other
countries
 on the list (from Russia to Korea. Rep.) almost pale in comparison with
China
 and the United States.
Furthermore
, in almost all of the
countries
 on the list, the amount of produced
electricity
 surpasses the amount of consumed
electricity
; only in Germany
we
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do we
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 have a higher rate of
electricity
consumption
 than
its
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in its
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production
.
Finally
,
this
 chart signifies the superiority of
China
 and
USA
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the USA
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 when it comes to
electricity
production
 and
consumption
 in 2014.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, electricity, production, consumption, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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