The graph below shows the changing patters of access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

The graph below shows the changing patters of access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
The line chart demonstrates four modern technologies and their trends in
UK
households between 1994 to 2008.
Overall
, all four technologies show an upward trend during the period.
In
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From
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1994 to 1995, the CD
player
was the only contemporary technology to appear in the chart, owned by nearly 50% of
UK
families. In the next year, mobile phones, first introduced in homes in the
UK
, accounted for 20%,
while
the percentage of CD players was three times more.
During
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1998 to 1999, the
Internet
was invented, with 10% of
UK
households having an
Internet
connection. DVD
player
first appeared in
UK
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the UK
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in 2002, owned by nearly 30% of
UK
families,
Then
DVD
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the DVD
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player
became to overtake
Internet
and mobile phone, and
finally
become the most popular technology in the chart in 2008 with nearly 90% of
UK
family user, followed by CD
player
, mobile phone and
Internet
connection with 85%, 80% and 70% respectively.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, player, internet with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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