Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?

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in life. Most
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, others try
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. I agree with the
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in the ensuing paragraphs.
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earlier. Many people are very passionate about their
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goal in their
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graduation
, they have a lot of job opportunities open in their specialization.
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computers
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or
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software
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learns
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has a great job opportunity with
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pay scale.
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, when childcare
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learnt
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that they had a more experience and knowledge about
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. On the
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contrary
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some people are confused about
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their lives
or their career
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decisions
. They try
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everything
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then
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choose
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option. In
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situation, not only
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invest their time but
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invest money to find their passions.
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, nowadays, inflation has
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increased
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,
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work
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only for
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money
because they have responsibilities
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family
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his family
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.
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, the survey
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times
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of India shows that 40% and more than that
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youngsters
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that they do not have
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intrusted
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. They only job or earn money
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their family members. In conclusion,
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the
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early age, students decide
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their dream and keep working on it. It is
also
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time-saving and they have more knowledge in
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field
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as
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compared
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to others.
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