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Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?

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very difficult to choose
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in life. Most
of
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people decide
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goal
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in earlier
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 and
work
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achive
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achieve
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However
, others try
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different
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opportunities
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 and find
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them
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. I agree with the
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former
 view and I will discuss
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these situation
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 in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
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a goal
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in
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earlier. Many people are very passionate about their
work
.
Firstly
, folks opt
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 goal in their
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childhood
 or teenager stage that they would save time. When those folks after completed
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graduation
, they have a lot of job opportunities open in their specialization.
For example
, if
student
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has
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 fascinated
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computer
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computers
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 or
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software
 and
learent
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learns
 in depth by him/herself, that student after completing graduation in
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field
,
he
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/
she
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has a great job opportunity with
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a higher
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 pay scale.
Moreover
, when childcare
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learnt
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field
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. On the
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contrary
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 some people are confused about
thier llives
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their lives
 or their career
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decisions
. They try
everythings
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everything
 and
then
 choose
best
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 option. In
this
 situation, not only
folks
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 invest their time but
also
 invest money to find their passions.
Moreover
, nowadays, inflation has
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increased
therefore
,
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the common
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 man
are
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work
 only for
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money
 because they have responsibilities
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family
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his family
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.
For instance
, the survey
of
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times
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 of India shows that 40% and more than that
youngstars
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youngsters
young stars
work
 that they do not have
intrasted
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intrusted
interested
. They only job or earn money
for feeding
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 their family members. In conclusion,
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the
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 early age, students decide
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 their dream and keep working on it. It is
also
 time-saving and they have more knowledge in
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a specific
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field
 as
compered
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compared
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 to others.
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