Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you thing this is a positive or a negative development?

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with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments,

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. Nowadays, the popularity of cannabis-based medicines, herbal remedies, and aromatherapy has increased as alternative medicines and treatments.

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disease like cancer. Trying massage, meditation, and yoga are

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extremely dangerous because none of them have scientifically

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development. As it’s free charge in Japan, calling

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for trivial matters is now getting a social problem and some

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die in the ambulance just because they couldn’t find a hospital with availability. Needless to say,

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women are over 65 years old and

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amount of medical

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since 70 to 90

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of their medical costs are covered by our tax. Advanced surgeries and prolonged

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researching difficult diseases and creating new drugs, our life expectancy could be extended in the future.

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Topic Vocabulary:

alternative medicines
treatments
positive development
negative development
health problems
usual doctor
access
personalized approach
holistic well-being
lack of regulation
evidence-based research
proper medical treatment

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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you thing this is a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

The best for the government to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport per day, 7 day a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?

In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.