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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line chart illustrates
average
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the average
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 Co2 footprint per individual in four countries including the
UK
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, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal over 40 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
Uk
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aand
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and
 Sweden showed
declined
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decline
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 in
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amount
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the amount
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 of Co2
emissions
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 during
given
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the given
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 period ,
while
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 Italy and Portugal showed
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an increased
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increased
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.
Furthermore
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, the highest country in
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amount
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the amount
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 of
green house
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greenhouse
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 gas was the
UK
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,
whereas
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lowest
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the lowest
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 country was Portugal. Looking at
chart
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the chart
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 in more detail, from 1967 to 2007 the
Uk
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 was the highest
amount
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 of carbon dioxide (Co2)
emissions
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 from approximately 11 to 9.
In contrast
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, Portugal was the lowest
amount
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 of Co2
emissions
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 almost from 1 to 5.5. Regarding other countries, Sweden reached a peak of
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amount
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the amount
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 of Co2
emissions
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at
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in
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 1997 around 10.2 and
then
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 showed
decreased
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to almost 5.6 in 2017. In comparison, from 1997 to 2007 Italy was the second country
release
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to release
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 Co2
emissions
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 from approximately 6.2 to 7.8.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, uk, amount, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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