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In the developed world, average life expentancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals ann society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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Driven by technological and medical advances by bounds and leaps, people live longer than before in many countries, especially in developed economies, which is not only a boon for individuals and society but causes a multitude of troubles. In
this
 essay, it will analyze the problems generated by the phenomenon and propose some feasible solutions. Major concerns of longer life expectancy are mainly contributed to three parts.
To begin
 with, it gives rise to more painful diseases,
such
 as cancer, cardiovascular illnesses, etc., because many of them are diagnosed with the elderly, which places a heavy financial burden and serious suffering on individuals.
Furthermore
, with the increasing number of ageing populations, communities and governments suffer from a shortage of labour.
For example
, Japan has stepped into a grey society, which forced the authority to elevate the retirement age in a bid to maintain sufficient working populations.
Lastly
, government has to face more financial expenditures and less tax revenues. On the one
hand
, it needs to spend a great amount of money on public services catering for senior citizens;
on the other
hand
, a decrease in the workforce makes it difficult to gain income. Both individuals and society should go
hand
 in
hand
 to address the repercussions of ageing populations. Citizens should put a high emphasis on physical exercise and illness prevention. In
this
 way, older people can be immune to many lethal illnesses,
thus
 avoiding unnecessary medical costs and suffering. Governments, which should be the main contributor to mitigate the impact, need to invest more funds and effort in the-state-of-art technologies, thereby reducing the dependence on the manual labour force.
For instance
, AI makes it possible for us to replace human workers in factories with robots, manufacturing products in an effective and cost-efficient manner. In conclusion,
although
 it has no silver bullet solutions to address the problems discussed above, we should take action collaboratively to ameliorate the negative impacts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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