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The users of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Thanks to the advanced technology in
this
 modern society, an increasing number of
people
 use social media platforms to communicate rather than speak in person.
However
, in my opinion, I assume that the benefits of the trend outnumber the drawbacks. It is true that there are some pros of speaking in front of
others
 that cannot be replaced by using the
Internet
. First of all, face-to-face communication would not be misunderstood easily. It is normal
that
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people
 to express their thoughts accompanied by not only their facial expressions, and gestures, but
also
 a variety of tones with emotion.
Thus
,
people
 can understand their feelings with vivid eye contact.
Nevertheless
, the words in a message, which can only put “emoji’’ to show their feelings, often lead to a serious problem of understanding.
According to
 the latest
statics
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 in 2022 from Taiwan, there were up to 80% of couples had conflicts on the
Internet
 as they had a misunderstanding on messages.
Secondly
, face-to-face contact can bring an ability to deal with problems at a better speed.
In other words
,
people
 usually get a quick response from
others
,
thus
 making
people
should
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throw back their thoughts immediately.
Nonetheless
, numerous youngsters are afraid of talking in person and choose to communicate on the
Internet
. What’s worse, without practising, it could lose the ability to work with
others
 well. In
this
 case, they may feel they are not part of the society, and
then
 lose social cohesion. In conclusion, as face-to-face communication is advantageous for easy understanding and a better ability to respond to
others
, it seems that the possible benefits are more significant than the potential dangers of contracting on the
Internet
.
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For task achievement, ensure to fully address all parts of the question such as discussing both advantages and disadvantages of using social media for communication. Provide a balanced analysis by presenting counterarguments as well.
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