The chart shows ways that schoolchildren get to school in three different countries.
The chart presents information about how pupils in three different countries travel to
school
, separated into 6 different categories.
For
the United States and the United Kingdom, the majority of Change preposition
In
students
travel by car
to school
, with figures of 40% and 39% respectively. In Australia
only a quarter of Add a comma
,Australia
students
use this
mode of transport.
The school
bus is the most common method of getting to school
in Australia; in the
USA
the number is only slightly behind those travelling by car. Less than a quarter use the Correct article usage
The USA
school
bus in the UK. Almost four times as many Australian students
walked to school
compared to the USA, with the UK being closer to Australia at 15%.
The remaining three categories showed only slight differences between the
countries, with public transport being followed by cycling, and finally
a category marked as 'other', which represents only about one twentieth
of the total in each country.
Add a hyphen
one-twentieth
Overall
, there are differences between the countries, but the school
bus and cars represent the most common ways for students
to travel to school
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