Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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care of aged home requires a plethora of power, money and energy. It is undeniable that
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has become an essential part
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our life.
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, a number of people find saving them beneficial,
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I believe that
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outweigh
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. One of the main positives of repairing and taking care of aged
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is that they can save history like a treasure.
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located in China have
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history and it connected with their traditions and mentality. Another advantage is that liberating development with
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style can lead to tourists wave. A good example here is Kazakhstan with their houses which are able for replacement are popular around the world. Turning to the other side of the argument, taking care of
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system needs a huge amount of money which is not affordable for all of them.
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of
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with huge potential
on the contrary
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the lack of investment they are merely taking valuable place. Another major disadvantage is senior construction with ancient
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can stop or make slower the development of the country.
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globalization country's level and impact ought to be in a high state and it is affordable with modern and convenient types of buildings. Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to
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conclusion that looking after ancient
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make
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sense and by repairing them we have abilities to be popular
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tourists.
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  • Preservation
  • Restoration
  • Demolition
  • Architectural heritage
  • Cultural significance
  • Tourist attraction
  • Urban landscape
  • Sustainability
  • Conservation
  • Economic benefits
  • Historical landmarks
  • Urban renewal
  • Infrastructure
  • Maintenance costs
  • Modern amenities
  • Building regulations
  • Community identity
  • Heritage conservation
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