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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Having a satisfying
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job
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 is considered more significant than its security.
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 some argue that securing a long-term career and long-term financial well-being is extremely important. In my opinion, I think that
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satisfaction
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 and a sense of
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 play an important role in living a healthy and productive
life
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. On the one hand, there's no denying that having a
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 that guarantees lifetime cash flow and a sense of security leads to a peaceful and stress-free
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.
People
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 with stable jobs do not have to worry about financial problems because they can secure their present and future.
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, permanent employees can get bank loans to make big investments and can invest money to earn more.
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,
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 who get rid of the stress of finding a permanent
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 and save money
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 can easily focus on other aspects of
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 as they can pursue their passions. Some
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 enjoy enjoying music, sports, or
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 around the world.
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,
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 working long-term long term,
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 can enjoy their lives and still be financially secure and satisfied.
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, in every profession,
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satisfaction
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 and
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 is more important than just making money and I agree.
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satisfaction
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 can often lead to a healthy mind in a healthy body.
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, having an enjoyable
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 will inevitably lead to health benefits. When employees are happy to do their jobs with full commitment and enjoyment, they may experience fewer health problems like heart disease.
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, they certainly have good health and healthy
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.
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happy and satisfied
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 can be more creative and innovative in ideas that actually contribute to organizational growth and productivity.
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, satisfied employees are
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 able to focus on their personal commitments and maintain a better work-
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 balance. In short,
people
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 can have different opinions about the importance of
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 security and long-term work. I believe career
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 is more important than
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having a
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life
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