The table and pie charts show the number of research students in Australia Universities in 2001 and 2010

The table and pie charts show the number of research students in Australia Universities in 2001 and 2010
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The given table presents data on the secondary and high school
teachers
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’ salaries in 5 countries in 2009.
Overall
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, the
teachers
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in
Luxemburg
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were the most paid,
while
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teachers
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from Australia were the lowest paid. It is
also
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evident that the amount of time to obtain maximum
salary
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was faster in Demark and slower in
Korea
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. The highest starting point of
salary
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was in
Luxemburg
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, at 80000
dollars
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,
while
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this
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figure for
teachers
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from Denmark was slightly lower to 35000
dollars
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.
Teachers
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from other countries, namely Australia, Japan, and
Korea
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, were paid a starting
salary
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of around 30000
dollars
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.
Then
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,
teachers
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with 15 years of experience in
Luxemburg
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earned 119000
dollars
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, compared with the salaries of Japanese and Danish
teachers
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with the same amount of experience, 65000
dollars
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and 54000
dollars
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respectively.
By contrast
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, in
this
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term,
teachers
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from Australia and
Korea
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were paid the lowest salaries, at only 48000
dollars
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.
Moreover
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, at least 10 years are required to reach the maximum
salary
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for
teachers
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from
Korea
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, Japan, and
Luxemburg
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, whilst Danish and Australian
teachers
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had to wait for less than 10 years
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, luxemburg, salary, korea, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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