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The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.

The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.
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The given line chart illustrates the average yearly expenditure of American residents on mobile
phone
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services
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, national and international landline
services
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 from 2001 to 2010.
It is clear that
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while
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 the average annual spending on national landline
services
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 saw a significant drop over the period shown, the opposite was true for
cell
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phone
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services
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 expenditure. Another noteworthy observation is that the
figure
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 for international
fixed-line
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services
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 was the lowest most of the period among the three surveyed types of
services
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 In 2001, US residents spent about $700 on average on national landline
services
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, compared to just around $200 and $250 on
cell
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phone
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 and international
fixed-line
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services
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 respectively. Over the next 5 years, the average yearly spending on national
fixed-line
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services
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 decreased by around $200
whereas
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 the
figure
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 for
cell
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phone
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services
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 rose by $300. The two figures both stood at around $500 in 2006. Meanwhile, after an initial increase, the average annual expenditure on international dropped to $300 in 2004 and remained unchanged until 2006. From the year 2006 onwards, the
figure
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 for
cell
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phone
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services
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 continued to rise sharply and finished the highest at around $750
while
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 the
figure
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 for national
fixed-line
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services
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 decreased to nearly $400 in the final year. During the same period, the average annual spending on international
fixed-line
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services
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 remained fairly steady and finished at just above $300.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, services, cell, figure, fixed-line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • annual
  • fixed-line services
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • economic factors
  • speculate
  • trends
  • notable change
  • shifts in consumer behavior
  • innovation
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