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The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.

The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010.
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The given line chart illustrates the average yearly expenditure of American residents on mobile
phone
services
, national and international landline
services
 from 2001 to 2010.
It is clear that
while
 the average annual spending on national landline
services
 saw a significant drop over the period shown, the opposite was true for
cell
phone
services
 expenditure. Another noteworthy observation is that the
figure
 for international
fixed-line
services
 was the lowest most of the period among the three surveyed types of
services
 In 2001, US residents spent about $700 on average on national landline
services
, compared to just around $200 and $250 on
cell
phone
 and international
fixed-line
services
 respectively. Over the next 5 years, the average yearly spending on national
fixed-line
services
 decreased by around $200
whereas
 the
figure
 for
cell
phone
services
 rose by $300. The two figures both stood at around $500 in 2006. Meanwhile, after an initial increase, the average annual expenditure on international dropped to $300 in 2004 and remained unchanged until 2006. From the year 2006 onwards, the
figure
 for
cell
phone
services
 continued to rise sharply and finished the highest at around $750
while
 the
figure
 for national
fixed-line
services
 decreased to nearly $400 in the final year. During the same period, the average annual spending on international
fixed-line
services
 remained fairly steady and finished at just above $300.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, services, cell, figure, fixed-line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • annual
  • fixed-line services
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • economic factors
  • speculate
  • trends
  • notable change
  • shifts in consumer behavior
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