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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is a fact that, nowadays, the number of young
adults
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 is more than older
people
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 in some countries. In my opinion, the benefits of
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 phenomenon outweigh the drawbacks. There are many advantages for countries that have more young
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 than older
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, older
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 compared with young
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 do not have adequate energy to do work.
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, in some jobs that require physical activity
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 as oil workers, staff must work physically for eight hours, so older
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 cannot do
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 work efficiently.
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, young
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 are fast learners because their brain is highly capable of learning new things in less time.
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, older
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 have spent more time learning.
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, young
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 have great motivation to explore new things and prove themselves to everyone,
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 older
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 are not as motivated as younger ones to achieve new objectives.
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, there are some disadvantages for societies in that the number of older
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 is less than younger
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. One of the most important aspects is that older
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 have great experience in many fields
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 as business.
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, the rate of error in the younger generation is high because they do not have enough experience to deal with some difficulties. Another aspect is that young
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 may not be capable of seeing problems from different views, so they might make some decisions that have irreversible implications. In conclusion, in some
countries
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 the population of older
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 is less than young
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.
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 situation has some negative and positive effects. In my point of view, positive effects are more significant than negative effects.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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