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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justifed while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own know/edge or experience. Write at least 250, words.

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Every profession is different from each other in terms of their salaries and benefits. Some
people
 believe it is fair that successful
sports
 players can earn more
money
 than
people
 in other important
fields
 and some
people
 believe that it is not fair. In my opinion, I think it is totally equitable because every field has its advantages and disadvantages.
People
 that are considered successful in their specific
sports
 get more recognition around the world and because of their influence, huge brands pay them a large amount of
money
 for their products advertisement.
Moreover
, successful athletes often make contacts with clubs and sometimes clubs offer millions of dollars to make a contract. So, they have a
lot
 of net worth. Sometimes exceeding over 1 billion dollars.
For instance
, Al Nasr is a Saudi Arabia football club that signed Cristiano Ronaldo for 200 million dollars. Probing ahead,
people
 in other important
fields
 do a
lot
 of hard work but they do not get that huge amount of
money
 because they have limited salaries and they do not have any sponsorships. They have to manage their expenses with their limited salaries.
Professionals
such
 as doctors have to study a
lot
 for approximately 7 years of their lives and
sports
professionals
 spend their time nourishing their skills as every field is different from another so it is totally acceptable because
sports
professionals
also
 have to do a
lot
 of work and perform well in
fields
.
To conclude
, it is totally fair that athletes earn more
money
 than
professionals
 in other
fields
 because they are more likely to be highly paid and get scholarships but they
also
 have to do a
lot
 of hard work to become successful and to maintain their consistency.
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