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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedan, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The graph illustrates the five countries' populations in emissions of
carbon
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 dioxide between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
carbon
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 footprints come from the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal.
Moreover
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, the UK has the most soot emissions,
as well as
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, Italy has an increased fluctuation.
To begin
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 with, the UK has 11 metric tonnes of co2 released into the atmosphere and it has a plummeting variation during the era.
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, Sweden is the second country to release co2 into the air in 1967.
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, Sweden had a fall during the period and it is the nation which emits
carbon
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 footprints lower in 2007.
On the other hand
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, Italy had a rise in variation in emitting co2 in the atmosphere.
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, it had a gradual increase during the period,
as well as
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,
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 it reached a peak during 2007.
Along with
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 it, Portugal
also
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 had a rise in variation in emitting co2 footprints in the environment.
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, it begins with
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2 per cent of the emission of
carbon
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 into the sky.
Moreover
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, it gradually rise and reached a peak in 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, however, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, co with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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