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Education should be free to all people and should be paid for and managed by the government Do you agree or disagree with this statement..

#education #people #government
There are several causative factors that
education
shuould
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should
 be free of cost.
Initially
, the majority of people
unable
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 to pay
fee
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,
purchase
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 dresses and other study materials.
This
 is because the fact they are poverty-stricken.
For instance
, in Pakistan, fees
of
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the
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university
education
 are high
therefore
, the parents merely allow their sons to get admission
for
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 tertiary
education
.
Furthermore
, due
the
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 sudden onset of emergencies
such
 as
,
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 natural disasters or floods and recession, individuals do not possess
an
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 ability to fulfil even their basic requirements.
This
 is because during these harsh
situations
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 farmers lost their cultivation, and the businessmen suffer from various losses.
Moreover
,
the
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education
 has included
in
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the basic rights of children as it is significant for
their
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 holistic growth and
economical
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 development of a nation.
Thus
, schooling should be managed by government bodies.
For example
, in Canada,
the
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each kid is receiving
education
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 without any cost so that they may carry their own occupation even as a street seller. Eventually, citizens are paying several sorts of taxes to the ministers
as a consequence
 it is
a
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 responsibility of politicians to render the educational service till the age of eighteen years old. To exemplify it, in India, students have been obtaining
education
 without paying any money until the senior secondary school grade.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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