The chart below gives information about how families in one country spenttheir weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spenttheir weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The bar chart illustrates the information about the weekly spending by the people of each country on various 8 different items in 1968 and 2018.
However
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,calculations had been mentioned in percentage (%).
Overall
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it is clear that
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the spending on Food,Fuel,Clothing and Personal
goods
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has declined over fifty years
while
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household
goods
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expenses remained the same.
However
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, Transport and Leisure's figures have increased over time. In terms of spending money on Food percentages have declined much approximately became halved in 2018 from 30% to about 15% in comparison with Housing rents which have increased around about 10% over 50 years
while
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Clothing and Personal
goods
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both reduced much by half decade from 10% to 5% and from about 8% to 4% respectively.
On the other hand
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, Household
goods
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have been remaining the same since 1968 (about 7%)
whereas
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Transport has a sharp increase of approximately 8% and Leisure spending is the only item
that is
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increased dramatically more than double from around about 8% to 22%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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