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Scientific research should be the responsibility of government rather than commercial organisations. Do you agree?

#research #responsibility #government #organisations
Everybody knows that scientific research is very important for developing our
life
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lives
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. We can catch good quality by
scient
. Some man or
scient
 says '
scient
 our is sun, We couldn'
t
 live without it' that's why scent for everyone we shouldn'
t
 put it only responsibility of the government. İ disagree about it and have some reasons. First, what is scientific? , it is mathematics, physics, biology, and other lessons. İf we look at scientific's old times! Many important sentiments don'
t
 go to school and their government is not offering it. They only work as a hobby or worry.
For example
, Edison, and
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Charles
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 Darwin are so
much
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apply
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popular in their time and even today. Socent, many governments have lebratatuary for
scient
 and they spend too much many for them.
However
, they can not be successful like commercial organisations. They work for money, reputation and popularity. That's why they work hard so much.
For instance
, we live in a pandemic to
Covit-19
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COVID-19
 viruses very soon and are not finished yet. Who is can find covit vaccien? Of ,course one private commercial organisation, İ
t
 name is Biontec and one family has bent and wife was found together. they can earn very much money and popularity, the example shows us,
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that scient
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scient
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science
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 is not only for governments.
To sum up
, those who want can join in the
scient
's life. According to the information and in the prefixes above.
İn
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In
 my opinion, governments should give more support, they can give lobratutuary or many or helping workplaces, we shouldn'
t
 forget, we can develop by
scient
.
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