The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The given line graph illustrates the average
number
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of travellers on a Caribbean island who had stayed in different locations (on cruise ships or on
island
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the island
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) and the total
number
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of them in 7 years period from 2010 to 2017. From an
overall
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perspective, the total
number
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of visitors had grown in the given duration.
Although
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at first reports more people had chosen to stay on the island, in the
last
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year more tourists decided to spend their time on cruise ships. The
number
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of people who had stayed on the cruise ship was nearly a quarter of a
million
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in 2010. The figure
then
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fluctuated and increased in 2011 to half of a
million
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and again downwards to its
last
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report in 2010 ( 0.25
million
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). Afterwards faced quiet growth reaching a peak of over 2
million
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in 2017.
On the other hand
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, in 2010, the
number
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of individuals who had preferred to stay on the Caribbean islands was approximately twice
in
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received
number
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than
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of
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the other group.
However
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,
this
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trend reversed entirely in 2017. All in all, the total
number
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of travellers to
this
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zone had grown dramatically from only a
million
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in 2010 to a greater level in 2017 with 3.5
million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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