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It is often said that the government spend too much money on the projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problem that are more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Money, today, holds every ounce of power there is to be held. There is an absolute plethora of
projects
 requiring our monetary assistance, which is yet another hot topic of discussion. Many claim that the government spends more than the required amount of money on the
projects
 to protect
wildlife
,
while
 there are more important problems on hand. Personally, I am in support of the capital being spent on
wildlife
, and in
this
 ,essay I'll be suggesting why. To commence, the fact that
wildlife
 is constantly under the stress that our environment causes, and our personal actions not having the best implications for it. The animals, plants, and every other organism that exists as a part of the
wildlife
 are fighting many odds to merely survive. Considering our habits are not going to change anytime soon, only worsen, the least we can do is to try to prevent
further
 damage,
funds
 being the only available offering. Continuing the argument,
according to
 the annual
funds
 decided by the government, it is proven that the 3,000,000 USD
that is
 set aside for the
projects
 related to
wildlife
, is not anywhere near the massive
funds
 that are to be used for many other
projects
. If required, there is a substantial amount of wealth being wasted on quite a few other
projects
, from where
funds
 could be
then
 diverted to the supposed other problems cited above. In conclusion, I remonstrate to the government wrongly spending its monetary
funds
 on
wildlife
, in dissonance
due to
 our actions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wildlife conservation
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecosystem
  • Human welfare
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Resource allocation
  • Cost-benefit analysis
  • Non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • Ecotourism
  • Sustainable development
  • Preservation
  • Endangered species
  • Habitat destruction
  • Climate change
  • Environmental stewardship
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