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What are the advantages and disadvantages of education?

#education
Nowadays,
education
 becomes more and more important in our life. We have to assert that if we desire to have a good job, we should have a certain amount of knowledge. Now,
education
 is focused and improved more.
According to
 our requirements, the
education
 system will have a schedule to satisfy the demand. But sometimes, it is going to have some holes. We can’t see that, but we can feel the existence of them. So what are the
advantages
 and disadvantages of
education
 ?
First,
let’s talk about the
advantages
. Because technology improve strongly at present, so we have a
lot
 of ways to study. We can study online or offline. And if we prefer studying online to studying offline, they are going to have some sessions on meeting apps like Zoom, Google Class or Google Meeting etc. Through
this
, we can be got acquainted with various processes. And the same things I said in the beginning,
according to
 our requirements, the
education
 system will have a schedule to satisfy the demand. Now is the 4.0 era, and everything is very very varied, including
education
. But everything that lives and exists in the world has its
advantages
 and disadvantages. And
education
 doesn’t erase them.
Although
education
 is having a
lot
 of various processes, their contents are too old, and they
don’t
 have a solution to improve them, that reason makes students feel that studying is very boring, and they
don’t
 have the effort to try. The next problem, teachers aren’t trained well, and they
don’t
 know how they could control their emotions. When they are not enough patient, they can tell off students badly.
Furthermore
, they can fight their students. Of course, not all teachers will have
this
 bad behaviour. But the problem had a
lot
 of criticism
of
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 people. In conclusion,
although
education
 had a
lot
 of new changes,
besides
 the
advantages
 are disadvantages and now they still
don’t
 stop making waves in our society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifelong education
  • continual learning
  • adapt
  • changing technologies
  • societal norms
  • cognitive function
  • cognitive decline
  • personal development
  • self-improvement
  • formal education
  • navigate
  • emphasis
  • pressure
  • contentment
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