A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Jun, How are you? I hope you're doing well. I'm excited to

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that you are going

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camping

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summer, I would like to give you some useful

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. As I

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you have never participated in any activities like

this

before right?

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I can assure

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you will definitely enjoy it because you can get closer to

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nature,

enjoy

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the breathtaking scenery and picturesque mountain views.

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memorable

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experience for you. Let me explain

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possible the negative sides.

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it is hard for you to explore the narrow road with no

experiences

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In addition

, please stay aware of your surroundings because you might encounter wild animals. As for the food, when you pick up some mushrooms please be careful because some species are poisonous even though you have cooked it.

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, how about If I join you

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this

summer camping? it would be fun if we can explore together and I can

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teach you about some survival hacks that might be helpful. I am looking forward to your reply soon. Warm regards, Lim

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

187 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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adventure
serenity
outdoors
refreshing
hustle and bustle
inherent
foster
distractions
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unpredictable
wildlife
adequate preparation
physical demands
researching
campsite
lasting memories
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