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Some believe the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 believe lowering the legal
age
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 for driving vehicles is the best mean to reduce
accidents
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 on roads.
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 I agree that there are other methods to make road safety better. On the one hand,young
people
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 may easily cause driving
accidents
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 because they can not think deeply. Science researches indicate that the immaturity of the frontal lobe among young
people
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 can lead to impulsive actions.Because of the lack of controlling ability, young
people
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 might do things without thinking twice. Young men may drive drunk or break the speed limit just for fun.
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,the uncomprehensive thinking makes them tend to not value life ,disrespect every road user,and cause dangerous driving.
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, tragedies may happen less by enhancing the minimum legal
age
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 for driving.
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,there is no strong evidence showing that young
people
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 cause more
accidents
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 than other
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 groups ,
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, young
people
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 have the right to commute by vehicle.
People
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 may consider young
people
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 as troublemakers on the roads,
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,the suppose is actually unproven.Driving
accidents
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 are not contingent on
age
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 but on individuals.
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,young
people
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 have to go to work or study as well, and they have the right to decide the method of transport.If they can only commute by public transportation, by bike,or by leg, it would be extremely inconvenient for their daily life. In conclusion,
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 some said that rising
legal
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age
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 for driving licenses is the best measure to protect users on the road,I believe individuals can not be stripped of the right to drive only for the sake of
age
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