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Nowadays more people are choosing to live with their friends or alone rather than their families. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that single living is preferable despite the negative influence
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 of residing in a family. I am convinced that individuals living on their own tend to demonstrate a larger number of academic gains
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 the presence of personal space compared to sharing living space. Living alone is a cornerstone in terms of personal growth and self-discovery.
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, living alone provides an opportunity for self-reflection, and allows individuals to focus on themselves without any distractions from the family’s side. Take students, studying their higher education as an example, in many cases, students frequently be disturbed because of households
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 as babysitting, and
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 of
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, the lack of full concentration makes their academic performance slow down.
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, there will be a time for exploring one’s identity, developing new skills, and pursuing individual passions if a person lives alone.
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, I admit that living with their families can be more advantageous in some cases. Students who live in remote cities often suffer from financial problems, which require working in order to cover basic needs at the expense of academic life.
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, it inevitably will cause problems with excessive reliance on parents.
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, separation from parents will be stable if parents can moderately offer financial support at the beginning of a separate residence. 
 In conclusion,
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 people can have effortless life by living with their families,
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 leads to inappropriate reliance
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 living alone and taking responsibility for their education may positively impact matureness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Erosion
  • Communal cohesion
  • Geographical dispersion
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Real estate dynamics
  • Psychological well-being
  • Technological facilitation
  • Independence
  • Traditional vs modern lifestyles
  • Intergenerational relationships
  • Virtual communities
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