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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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This
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 chart shows the
energy
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comsuption
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consumption
 of an average Australian household and how
propotion
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proportion
promotion
 of emitting
greenhouse
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gas
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 in each type of
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.
First,
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the most bigger different
informations
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 are using heating and other appliances, relate to 42% and 15%, but they going
up side
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upside
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 down in
gas
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emittions
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emissions
, which
is
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are
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 15% and 28%.
Secondly
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, using
energy
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of
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from
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 lighting and refrigeration are similar
change
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changes
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 in
greenhouse
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gas
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emittions
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emissions
. The former
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uses
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 4% and produce
double
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a double
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number
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the number
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 of
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emittions
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emissions
 to 8%. The latter
energy
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 have the same situation about 7%
in
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apply
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using
energy
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 but emit 14%
greenhouse
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gas
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. The
last
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 two parts of things are water heating which is
second
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the second
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 large source of
i
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I
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 using
energy
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 and the smallest
cumsuming
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consuming
energy
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 one = cooling. Indeed, there
are
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is
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 just a
marginally
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marginal
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 change in
greenhouse
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gas
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emittions
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emissions
 which, grow from 30% to 32% and rise from 2% to 3%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas, emittions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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