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In some cultures children are encouraged to compete against each other. What are the advantages and diadvantages of this approach?

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Children are motivated to be
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 other in some cultures. Personally, I believe that it fosters them to become
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 and in some cases be demotivated.
This
 essay will discuss my point of view in the following paragraphs, including some examples from my own experience. One of the main disadvantages of motivating youngsters to compete is creating a sense of
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heaviness
envies
 amidst adolescents. Those who are sensitive to
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first,
in no circumstance do adopt others' success. To exemplify, one of the most outstanding
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,
Zigmund
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Sigmund
 Freud claims that the main source of
enviness
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envies
 in early-aged school-goers is confrontation
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 student with another.
Moreover
, another concern is that
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 confrontation causes
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 of motivation.
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 exposing competition with coevals to be
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adolescents could lose their self-confidence
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is an essential point of courage deficiency.
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 youngsters tend to be praised by their parents or teachers,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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