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The world’s natural resources such as oil, forests, and freshwater are being consumed at an ever-increasing rate. What are the dangers of the situation? what can be done to solve the problem?

#world’s #resources #oil #forests #rate #dangers #situation
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The
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 of natural
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are
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 an alarming rate globally, so it will be finished soon
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, it may end up in the ecosystem as well if
people
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 don't take nature seriously, the problem can be solved by limiting the
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 of natural
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 and find alternative ways to replace it.
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,the most dangerous threat of it to the ecosystem
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 is if folks utilize the
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 the same way they can vanish the earth very soon because the living extension is dependent on nature so, they need to think twice to
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 them for their own purposes.
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, water is globally used too much and somewhere
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 put litter in seas and oceans which destroys the marine life
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 many sea animals are dead and
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 pollute the water.
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,
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 should make strict rules to save the forest for upcoming generations and
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 is the home of so many animals if
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 cut them for their purposes they
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 become homeless. All the authorities should come on
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 platform to find
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 of energy like wind and solar energy is one of common which give surety to save the future so, scientists should go for them to make it
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 reliable source.
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, solar power is
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 in America to give electricity to many homes which is
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 initiative towards the save the environment. In conclusion,
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people
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relay
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 on natural
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 to achieve everything in their life and make
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better
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 place, it is
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 destroying the world which is
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 threat so,
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 should
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 solar power to make
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 better .
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