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Are computers an essential feature of Morden education? What subjects can be better taught using computers? Are there aspects of a good education that cannot be taught using computers?

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Nowadays, the idea of teaching by
computers
 becomes a trend. People have different views about letting
computers
 play a vital role in future education.
While
 technology would definitely improve educational qualities, there are some
subjects
 that could only be taught by humans. On the one hand,
subjects
 that need support by simulating big data or building 3D models have a just need of
computers
’ help.
For example
,
firstly
, architect students can build digital models to simulate the situation
instead
 of making a real building that costs a lot of money and labour in reality.
Secondly
, students who major in medicine can practice having surgery in the virtual world with the help of Augmented Reality.
In other words
,
computers
 provide more efficient and accurate teaching tools for teachers to give better lessons.
On the other hand
, it is impossible for
computers
 to replace human creativities and emotions. Painting, composing and logical thinking are all methods which can help people express their ideas and sensations. Some of the artificial intelligent applications can write “poems” by imitating poets all over the world. But they would never feel the same emotions as human beings, that’s why
subjects
such
 as arts, music, literature and philosophy cannot be taught using technology devices and only can be trained by tutors who have passion and warmth. Teachers offer personal guidance, emotional support, and adaptive learning that technology cannot replicate.
Overall
, in most of the
subjects
, the advantages of teaching with
computers
 outweigh the disadvantages.
However
,
computers
 would never replace teachers since humans can convey emotions and have sensations to express feelings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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