The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram shows how West Park Secondary had changed over the period of 60 years since the time of its construction in 1950.
Overall
,
while
a main road and a
playground
in the bottom-right-hand side remain unchanged, some significant changes including the expansion of a
school
building, the addition of some new facilities, and the demolition of residential areas. In 1980, a main road in the north of the
school
was accompanied by a
playground
. On the left of the
school
, some houses were constructed above
a
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large farmland. After 30 years,
while
the main road and the
playground
remained unchanged, some houses were demolished to make room for car parking. The
school
building got expanded in two parts -
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was a science block and the other was the main building. Another change that took place was the farmland convention into a sports field. Over the next 30 years, the
playground
was reduced in size to make room for a small sport field, located nearby a car park. The expansion of the parking, which increased threefold in size and was constructed in the location of the sports field in 1980, was a significant change. Other structures were unaltered from 1980.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words playground, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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