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nowaday, more and more people are becoming over weight. some people think that the solution is to increase the price of fattening foods. to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Today, the number of people who are being fat is more than it used to be. Many people say that increasing the price of fattening
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 is a good idea to solve
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 problem.
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 essay. It should be known that fattening
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 as junk food, dairy product and treat are not the main reason causing overweight. The main reason is their lifestyle, some of them have a hectic life so they have to work or take care of their family. It leads to missing time and they cannot do enough exercise to keep fit.
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, fattening
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 are necessary for our body and health,
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 as dairy products including milk and eggs are very nutritious. Milk contains a lot of calcium and it needs for the improvement of bones, nails and teeth. Turning to eggs, provide a large amount of protein and vitamin D and these things are very important to our body. These products are good for us.
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, increasing the cost of fattening
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 is not a good solution.
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 of that, we have to make healthier
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 more attractive and affordable by the way give consumers special offers and promotions when they buy
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