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Some people think that governments should invest more in public transportation instead of building new roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #governments #transportation #roads
Some opine that public
transportation
 should be upgraded
instead
 of construction
new
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 roads. Others opine that
authority
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 should give more funding for building
new
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a new
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harbor
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. I,
however
, agree with the latter view.
This
 essay tends to give some reasons behind
this
. we live in an era of technology, where most
of
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the
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people are busy with their work, or achieving their
goal
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goals
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 in life. Nowadays, most public have their own vehicle. They
use
 it on a daily basis. Today's generation is earning more than the previous generation. Having private
transportation
 is a kind of freedom. So, today youngsters tend to buy more vehicles. They are not afraid of using EMI to do it.
This
 trend is increasing vehicle
number
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. These are the reason
use
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 of public
transportation
 is lower day by day.
This
 means even if
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authority
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authorities
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 invest more in public
transportation
 there will be not many advantages to
this
.
On the other hand
, if the state
invest
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 more in the construction of road, it will be able to provide more space for the increasing number of vehicles. The traffic time will be less.
public
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 can go from one place to another in a much easier way.
Moreover
, development in
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harbor
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 can increase the opportunity for new jobs for the community who are living outside of the town. folk can
use
 it to do the job, which, is far from their residence. With
this
 cutthroat era of competition, anyone can
use
 good communication opportunities to improve their skills. which, will lead them to well-paid jobs and will improve their lifestyle eventually. If any authority wants to improve a nation as a team it should improve the communication facility of that country.
To sum up
, the government who are investing in the construction of
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harbor
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, are focusing on
long-term
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the long-term
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 development of the nation.
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