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Some people think the best way to learn a culture is to learn its language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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culture ,
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 of them think
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 its
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 is the best
idea
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.
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 not only one way to learn a culture. we can take other
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 to learn a new
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. I admit that some people will think
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 some understanding of “
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local
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 to chat and work. In some foreign
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,the professor
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 and will not speak
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 of English. So those students who learn
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also
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 present in
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, if you don’t know it
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 , you will misunderstand the main
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 you will miss the beauty of
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 film. But in my opinion , some
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a
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little understanding of learning
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language
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 .so if they can learn a
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 successfully. Can they learn a culture? The answer is false. We can
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listen
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 local music to help us have a great understanding of foreign
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language
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. Those are my ideas , I believe
learn
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 a
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 isn’t the best
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 to learn a
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 .we can choose many different ways too.

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