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The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.

The chart below show the number of magazines sold per person in five countries in 2003 and 2005, with projected sales for 2007.
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The bar chart illustrates the
number
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 of
magazines
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 sold per
person
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 across five
countries
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 in the years 2003 and 2005 with a forecast of
sales
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 in 2007.
Overall
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, a higher
number
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 of
sales
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 in all three years can be seen in
country
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B
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.
However
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, the lowest
sales
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 rate can be recorded in
Country
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E
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 each year.
Furthermore
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, the
number
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 of
magazines
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 sold per
person
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 experienced a fall in
Country
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 A,
B
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 and C.
Whereas
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 in
Country
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 D the
number
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 of
sales
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 experienced a steady increase and in
Country
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E
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 the
number
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 of
magazines
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 sold rose and fell. It can be seen that there is a variation in the
number
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 of
magazines
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 in the five different
countries
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.
In
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Country
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,Country
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 A and
B
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 are the only
countries
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 where in 2003 the
sales
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 were over 40
magazines
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 per
person
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. Even if the assumption is that the
number
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 of
magazines
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 sold per
person
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 declines to 38 in County A and 45 in
Country
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B
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 it still will be the highest recorded
sales
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in contrast
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 to
Country
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 C, D and
E
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.
In addition
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, the only year where an increase in two
countries
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 can be recorded is 2005. Both
Country
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 D with growth of eighteen to twenty and County
E
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 with 4 to 7 sold
magazines
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 per
person
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, magazines, person, countries, sales, country, b, e with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Increases
  • Decreases
  • Comparison
  • Significant
  • Projected
  • Sales
  • Economy
  • Digital Media
  • Impact
  • Cultural Factors
  • Analysis
  • Future Trends
  • Market Conditions
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