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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your on this course.

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I hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of
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spirit. I am writing
this
 letter with the crucial purpose of asking
for
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 attend , your
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interesting courses, because I am very keen on cookery. So.I went to make a delicious dessert for my family. On the one hand,the first and most important thing which should be mentioned is that . On the other side of the coin, I would really appreciate it if you I don't know how to make sweets, that's why my family is angry with me.
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, having given the previous facts , I am available any time if you need any
further
 information.regarding the situation.at your earliest convenience
as well as
 look forward to hearing.from you in the near future .
Thus
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