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The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport.

The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport.
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The pie charts illustrate the data on
three
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 different elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of
three
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 various nutrition schedules named an average
diet
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, a healthy program and a healthy
diet
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 for training. From the overview, it is crystal clear that food
contained
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 glucose was the most preferable one for all
three
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 kinds of
diet
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,
while
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by contrast
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 fat had been noted as the least chosen category. In terms of the most significant feature of the charts, sugar-contained food was by far highly preferred for all
three
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 types of food, as it especially made up healthy
table
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 for sportsmen(accounting for 60%).
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, for just
healthy
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a healthy
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 menu it compiled 50% of the list. Regarding
towards
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the rest of the information, the next major segment of these
nutritment
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nutriment
 lists was protein which mostly was preferred on
average
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an average
the average
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diet
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(rated at 40%).
Furthermore
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, in
a
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apply
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stark
contrast
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 the least
choise
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choice
 preference for these provisions was fat which rated at between 15-20%.
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, when added together, the two categories(protein and fat) made up half of
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the
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healthy
diet
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 menu.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 68%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, diet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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